Week 13 Critique

Kelsie Hair:
1. Compare and Contrast:
This blog entry was great. It reached out to the audience, and really broke down the idea of compare and contrast into a more simpler way for the audience to comprehend. I liked the way you described to the audience the differences between the subject by subject, and the side by side comparison. It was great that you also explained how both ways are used and are beneficial to who ever is writing about whatever.

2. Rhetorical terms:
In this paragraph you explained the idea that writers use rhetorical tools to help a writer connect with their audience, however when you listed the tools that can be implemented into the writing you did not define the specific tools. This would be a great explanation for our class if that was your targeted audience, but some people that are not in our class might read this and not know what alliterations, allusions, similes are. You just might want to broaden your writing for a larger audience.

Amy Bean: 
1. 8A
I liked this article. The ideas that were presented were done quite well, and  got all of the information that you were trying to give. The example about your history teacher was great. I liked the part that adding more definitions leaves no room for misinterpretations. Well done.
2. 12B
 In this blog entry I got that you wanted to talk about how to write an essay, however I felt that this essay needed more fleshing out. The entry seemed a bit vague to the reader. It talked about the fisherman's the one that got away, as an example of adding more to our writing, and how it is the same story, but its just a bit more defined. I felt you could have defined, or added more examples, so that the reader can truly connect and take in the information you are trying to give.

Kaitlyn Glauser:
1.Rhetorical tools
I loved how you broke this blog down for the reader! It highlighted the main points you are trying to convey, and gave some descriptions as to what the rhetorical tools were and how to use them. I feel that this blog entry benefited your audience the most! Great job.
2. Outline on writing a paper
I liked the beginning of this blog, and how it started out as defining the outline of how to write and essay, but more towards the middle of this blog entry it turned out to be more about the importance of a peer review or a critique. I would have liked a bit more fleshing out of your blog, and I would have liked for you to go more into the meat of writing an essay to just break it all down for the reader. If you  do that, and talk just a little about the peer review this blog would be awesome!

How to Write an Essay

Every time a writer creates an essay there are specific formats, and processes that are used in order to get not only the information of the essay out, but to also get out the thoughts, ideas, and feelings of the writer, so that the reader can see through the writer's perspective. Every essay format has classification and division, which helps to structure the essay by first introducing the topic at hand, then dividing that topic into sub points which become the body of the essay. The sub points are then elaborated on and can be either compared or contrasted to bring the points together, or set them apart through various descriptions. When the writer elaborates on the sub points he or she also uses writing aids such as visual rhetoric, visual gazing, and cause and effect to help build the essay. The use of visual rhetoric helps with the descriptions of certain points by describing the taste, touch, smell, feel, and sounds of the item being discussed. The use of Visual Gazing allows the writer to connect and  appeal to the reader's feelings, and emotions through familiarity of family, travels, cultures, consumer appeal, and national familiarity. The writer also uses cause and effect to help move the essay along in a cognitive chronological format. This gives the essay a nice flow that is smooth and neat like a road map that takes the reader from point A to point B without any detours. Finally the essay is ended with  a conclusion that summarizes the basis and strengths of the essay to reiterate the main idea, and convey the thoughts of the writer to a simple ending.